Wednesday, August 21, 2013

The third ...

The Third
is like an elf,
cute and coiled
with a snail face
and a needle nose,
always existing in marriage.
A child or adultery,
tea cup and cigarette,
television or silence,
there is always a third 
with its shadow looming tall on a wall
that does not depart with the Sun;
Also, those worry lines on your forehead
that has nothing to do with age.
It’s a snail, withdrawing the tip of its head
into the stone shell
at times, poking its head out
winking,
moving inside its hard robust covering
even when not seen. The third is
a rotten fish smell that reaches you much before
you go to the market place.

You, her, I and the third – we all eat and thrive on betrayal. 






26 comments:

Brian Miller said...

dang...hard truth in this...there is always something that will come between if we let it....another...an addiction or a lust, or something on the surface that seems healthy only it isnt...

Mary said...

Oh, wow, just wow! So very true. So often there is something that 'stinks' beneath the surface....but often one only infrequently gets a whiff.

There are poems, and there are POEMS. This one, Celestial Dreamz, is a POEM!!

Gabriella Skriver said...

This is an amazing poem Celestial Dreamz! Very powerful use of imagery.

Ramakrishnan Ramanathan said...

This is awesome and amazing verse Baishali. You must have been in on your peak form while penning this one. Warm Regards Ram

The Unknowngnome said...

I and my third bow again to you Madame and I kiss your hand. Superior poetry! Beware the self elf or gnome. :)

ayala said...

wow..strong and powerful. Painful!

Ygraine said...

Wow, this is almost painful to read...it is so true.
Why oh why does there always have to be this rather unhealthy Third lurking just under the surface in a relationship that would otherwise be perfect?
One of those crosses we have to bear I suppose...

Ella said...

Well done! Tough subject and you really brought it!
Bravo

Beachanny said...

Threes rarely work even with children. So many things with green heads have a way of separating the "two". I like that this is vague enough to include all of that and yet be suggestive of the other - partner, mistress, co-worker who gets the time and attention. Tightly written, well said!

Nataša Dolenc said...

this has some great imagery..
"those worry lines on your forehead
that has nothing to do with age."i love the way you say this... and yes, there's some hard truth in it.

Gemma Wiseman said...

The Third is such a cold and distant title for a cold and distant invader of harmony. Especially loved the idea of stench that pervades the poem. Powerful.

Vandana Sharma said...

Deeply buried secrets!!! Thanks for the encouragement:)

Kodjo Deynoo said...

Oh there had to be someone in mind, for this piece, You really went for it. The "third"

Brian Miller said...

caught this earlier so i will just say happy sunday

Mary said...

Reading once agan this Sunday morning! Continued deep appreciation of this poem!

Grace said...

Wow, really good poem ~ Sharp and excellent use of metaphor ~ The third elf, shadow, snail, rotten fish....and finally that ending line, betrayal ~

Anonymous said...

David , Solomon , Akbar..etc had much more than third , viz dozens ,scores, hundreds and thousands."official" and "unofficial"..


Now

Marriage ??

Who made Law ?

Alright .What is the basis of Law ?

Whats the basis of Love..?

and of Life ?Whats the Basis of Human Relationships ?

Whats the basis of Carnal Knowledge ?

What's Right and What's Wrong ..???

What's True and what's Not ?

Whats Good ?whats Bad ?

Why people say Hard Truth,Sad Truth, Great Truth , Deep Truth, Ugly Truth,Stinking Truth etc etc ? what Truth is Absolute and Conclusive?Whats The Basis of Truth of the *Matter in Reference ?
( *Pati,Patni aur Woh )

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Sumana Roy said...

nicely written...a tiny snail and what an impact...... wow!!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

One of your best, Moon........strong, powerful and oh so wise.

Celestial Dreamz said...

the 'third' space in a relation isn't necessarily about a 'pati patni woh' concept ...

Justin Huskey said...

Thia piece is so very honest and personal. I love the line about the shadow which does not depart with the Sun. The "third" is NEVER an easy thing to overcome, and you have depicted it well here. Thank you for sharing.

ashok said...

brilliant writing

Rose said...

This is magnificent Moon! Excellent writing brilliant metaphors and the last line is absolutely stunning :)

deeps said...

there s always a shade of mystery hanging about our lives-- some for the good and well, some for the bad reasons,,

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Someone always loses out when there is a third...maybe everyone loses out. I so understand this poem, kiddo! Sad to say.

ധ്വനി (The Voice) said...

I am so late to reach in this dream world. Read a few poems.. shall come back soon for further reading.
Amazing ....

With all my wishes,
Mukesh