Monday, May 30, 2011

city









posted for ONE STOP POETRY PICTURE PROMPT.

11 comments:

The Unknowngnome said...

Enjoyed the alliteration. Like especially "the confused sunset and sunrise, and I".

City life sometimes does make one feel like "life remains JUST another day", to be made ready for YET another, but hope rises higher than any high-rise.

Brian Miller said...

nice. i like the night and day confused as is easy to happen in the city...and the life in a laundry bag, that whole last stanza really...

Rose said...

Wonderful form and flow, love how you wrapped it up in the last verse! Another prefect write my dear Celest!

ayala said...

Nice....I love the last few lines bringing us back to reality... Just another day in a gray laundry bag....awesome!

Glynn said...

The city on Sunday -- I spent yesterday in Chicago - and it was a day like the day in your poem. Well done.

zongrik said...

I agree with Brian, I like -

and life remains just another day
in a gray laundry bag

kind of lonely in the laundry bag, even if it's full...

emmettwheatfall.com said...

A cool poem. Love the alliteration and assonance. A wonderful write.

Rachit said...

strangely wonderful :) enjoyed it.. :)

Tulika Verma said...

Lovely. Effortless and expressive. :)

Old Ollie said...

Nice work on this one - you really bring the reader to the city.

Andy said...

Lovely visual.
I like "the confused sunset and sunrise,
and I;"

Nicely done!