behind me,
tapping, tiptoeing,
following;
if I am asleep or I am awake,
whether through a melting sunlight
or a cascading curtain of rainfall.
Looking back would only destroy all hope.
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Tuesday, August 30, 2011
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I like this very much. Sometimes it is hard to turn something from one's imagination into reality! It isn't the same somehow.
Good morning ... I have not been up very long, so my eyes are not yet reading accurately. So, I at first read footfalls as football. Very silly I know. I am glad I finally saw the words properly for they are very beautiful.. And as I read again, your words created a beautiful picture.
^ @ old raven - hehehe Gosh you have got me grinning and laughing aloud a while with that! This is the best comment I have had for a while now :-D ... well now, a tip tapping of football sounds not so bad after all ... hehe ...
Beautiful!!!!!!!!!!
Very true, sometimes the reality isn't what you wanted, but sometimes its better, either way no going back. Unless you can build a time machine..haha
great turn line there at the end...are they good or bad...guess you will find out when they catch up...smiles.
This is so true things are hard to turn
"I keep hearing footfalls
behind me,
tapping, tiptoeing,
following"
This part was very eerie. I loved it. :)
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Love the depth... very inspirational in feel. Intriguing too.
I like the "feeling" of the "footfalls" through the "rainfall", "tapping" "tiptoeing" like the rain itself.
Not bad MAD! (Moonlight and Dreamz) :)
Short but very meaningful!
Eyes forward can be a good way to go.
LOL on footfalls / footballs.
profound.
Love the unexpected ending - yes, I do think it would be best not to see:)
hey..
again like i said before magic is born in little things and your lines do give birth to it..!
keep writing
dasvadaniya..!
Moon, You have such a talent for adding the soft touches of nature
"whether through a melting sunlight
or a cascading curtain of rainfall."
And realizing that the beauty is there...no need to look back...
So thoughtful and beautifully done
amazing job...
Hohoho,
What charming poetry you have posted here.
Invite you to share 1 to 3 poems with us, anything could fit the theme of object,
Cheers.
Hope to see you in.
Happy Writing..
xoxox
Ooooh, that last line packs a punch. I love this one!
C D,
It is best to let the hope within have own life and not to kill it by curiosity.
Take care
C D,
It is best to let the hope within have own life and not to kill it by curiosity.
Take care
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