Tuesday, March 5, 2013

Envy ...

Envy - the illogical emotion ... 
written for - http://poetryjaam.blogspot.in/


I swallowed down 

the jaded green colored envy 

that was tossed from under my door

like a love letter, 

and I wondered what’s so green about it!

A dark dismal disturbing jealousy

screamed out from a

 bleeding red and orange flame of pain 

and I struggled to simmer it down

swallow it down

grin it down …


if only I could have forgotten you,

and if only love hadn't been a  fragile origami dragonfly,

I would have heard the sober olive green whispers  

I would have heard the enchanting secret of the magnificent forest green!

If only … 

19 comments:

Ramakrishnan Ramanathan said...

Superb,sublime & meaningful.Yout new profile picture is awesome too !

Peggy said...

Thanks for posting on Poetry Jam! I hope you will return. It does seem funny that we associate envy with green now that you point it out. Nicely done.

Rose said...

I so admire your writing Moon, it always strikes a cord and your phrases are so beautiful from beginning to end. Fabulous:)

Dark Knight said...

Super poem, moon. This one has great metaphors and lots of meaning. Awesome!

Mary said...

You have expressed emotion so well in this poem. Envy and jealousy are indeed difficult to grin down. Sometimes it really does seem like love is fragile!

Brian Miller said...

f only love hadn't been a fragile origami dragonfly,
I would have heard the sober olive green whispers


really cool section and i like how you contrast the green of envy with teh green of life in the forest....

Adhi Das said...

u have expressed the poem superbly with a great poetic style..GOD<3U

Poet Laundry said...

Oh that is exactly how the pain of jealousy feels!

Abin Chakraborty said...

envy can be disturbing indeed.and does make us forget other beauties of life.

Emma Major said...

superb

Mario Enumerables said...

well written!! like it,,,

Kimolisa said...

gorgeous is the first word that came to mind. I love how you can paint such an ugly feeling in such beautiful words. I love this poem.

Jack said...

I love how you questioned a common idea then introduced your own color concept.

This was my favorite part:

"simmer it down swallow it down grin it down"

Sherry Blue Sky said...

"if only love hadnt been a fragile origami dragonfly".....yes, exactly! His loss, though!

McGuffy Ann said...

Colourful, emotional depiction of envy!
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Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Beautifully expressed.

Kodjo Deynoo said...

Romantic and beautifully expressed with a hint of sadness

Akila G said...

Lovely play of words to see an emotion in a positive colour,,,perhaps an attemtpt to wriggle out of it!

VaNdAnA ShArMa said...

wonderful,,,loved the emotions...